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A Typical Day
Trilerium:
--- Quote from: Ross on January 06, 2012, 01:58:52 am ---that was an intense read, very good.
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--- Quote from: Keith on January 06, 2012, 05:47:39 am ---DEAR GOD
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--- Quote from: Mojohaza1 on January 06, 2012, 12:34:47 am ---that was a good read! very imaginative, you've created one fucked up character there! O_o
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Glad you guys like it :P i was trying to make the character as close to insanity as i could
Green:
Very well written. I can honestly say I only found two or three mistakes. Looking forward to more :)
Trilerium:
--- Quote from: Green on January 06, 2012, 09:41:21 pm ---Very well written. I can honestly say I only found two or three mistakes. Looking forward to more :)
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what were they? i'll fix any that u can find :)
Green:
--- Quote ---...large like you would use to skin an animal, but lastly is the object I hold dear
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Insert a period after "animal". It's run on sentence.
--- Quote --- Although I am not a normal person I am not crazy,
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Insert a comma after "person"
--- Quote --- When I reach my home I remove my things and take out my cross.
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Insert a comma after "home"
Just a few minor things, really. Otherwise, it is exceptionally well written.
Trilerium:
Thanks :) i fixed the errors